You
only wield butcher knives
under your legs
and belly dance,
rolling like the ceiling which
eagerly swarms in on itself,
a horde of moving bumps
flowing into the clouds.
Up there, you see fields of
corn in golden rows,
kid goats nipping at tails,
ink-stained pyramids and ashes,
nodding into the sea,
groveling where the wisps of
goblin waves never cease,
oh, the monsters are endless!
Drown, before the moon pulls the water back,
miring
you into its hidden parts.
Drown, while the gods toast your demise
assisting you with their raindrop goblets,
reeling sharks from the sea and
languidly sailing them through
inebriated air during the
night, like flopping asteroids or
gyrating paper airplanes that bite.
I like how the image roll, like a belly dance. Very fluid. Nice!
thank you
Wonderful imagery. Magical.
thank you so much, i’m glad you liked it
if dark chocolate milkshakes are all it takes then I’m gonna start mainlining that shit!!!!!!!
You always make me laugh, YeOldeFoole, my dear.
you always make my day, dear one! thank you!
Pressure! The feeling is mutual.
I wanted to write something good, smart. But I´m just stunned by your poem!
Don’t write good, smart things. Just tell me how it made you feel.
I liked the ending a lot!
I’d like to leave a superb comment, but quite frankly, I’m speechless. Chalk it up to the anti-depressants lol.
Those make me speechless, too : )
It’s nice that you know the feeling lol. But doesn’t it ever make you want to stop relying on them? I wish I didn’t.
I don’t. Not anymore. I fucking HATE that shit.
Well it is great to see you made it out with your sanity intact; And an endlessly creative mind to boot. Sorry if I brought up some negative emotions though. It wasn’t my intentions.
Oh, sorry, no I am just very vehement when it comes to that topic. My sanity being intact is probably still up for debate…
I understand. I guess we are all insane in our own way. Some are just accepted as “normal” by today’s society.
This was powerful stuff to read through. Your application of half spring-rhythm and cutting lines off works well to bring the reader a feel of rhythmical completion. Great stuff.
Thank you so much.
As usual your imagery is wonderful . You give me faith to carry on writing in a world full of ugly.
That is all there is. Thank you so much.
Enigmatic. Ominous.
“reeling sharks from the sea and languidly sailing them through inebriated air during the night” is wonderfully lyrical.
Thank you, Paul. I love your comments, as ever.
“flopping asteroids… gyrating paper airplanes”
What do they put in your water, wherever you are?
Oh, it’s not water, my dear. ; )
Chocolate milkshakes, perhaps? 😉
Dark chocolate milkshakes, mmmm.
I could make a $arah Palin joke here, but i won’t….
I think you just did ; )
Oh, you’re good! So very, very good!
Yep!
Shrinks, like this paper airplane bites wow! Question are your posts from archives or do you post as you write or is it a secret? Bye
I post as I write. If it is an archived poem, I’ll usually make a note of that.
Like that thanks